It was just another
day in everyone's life .Office-goers buzzing with their smart phones, couples
waiting to board the train to get to the other side of the city, children with
over-loaded bags and vendors waiting to sell their goods on board.
Amidst all this
hustle-bustle in one corner, 12 year old Ramu woke up and collected his
half-full mineral water bottle .He smiled at the on-goers and rubbed his eyes clear.
He gathered his large cement bag and set out on his daily chore. He collected
the water packets littered all over the station .He filled his bottle with few
of them which had left-over water and then threw the empty packets into his
cement bag. He walked among the twelve tracks and collected as much as he could
.Sometimes there would be fights with other kids in collecting bags. Ramu would
walk tirelessly all day long collecting and filling his bags. Ramu passed by
the nearby slums where he would halt and watch boys play cricket and see them
hit a six or four. The stumps, bats and everything were made from scrap or were
those of giveaways from the rich households on the other side of the slum. Some
older guys came nagging at Ramu and teased him now and then. Ramu knew his
fragile frame would never allow for fights and run at speeds he could to save
himself.
He loved to watch the
kites that were flown by some kids who were younger than him. He loved the
various colors, shapes and sizes of the kites and often wish he could afford a
kite. Ramu envisaged a life where he could be filled with kites and walked on.
In his world there was only poverty, food scarcity and hatred.
Ramu stopped by at
Annadurai’s Tea shop and had tea. He looked into the sky and the sun blackened
his eyes. For a while Ramu could see the people with a ray of red aura around
them .Ramu wiped his eyes once again with his nimble fingers and gave two
rupees to Annadurai and picked up his cement bag and walked on once again .
As he reached the
housing board colony he checked his water bottle and Mrs.Sheethal fed Ramu the
left-overs from the previous day party. Mrs.Sheethal looked at Ramu and wished
she could help him better his life but knew she was bound by certain
inexpressible ties. She had her own worries and responsibilities that ate all
her time and patience that to think of helping another was next to impossible.
Ramu thanked Sheethal and left with a content heart and also finished the water
in his bottle and asked Sheethal for more water. Sheethal filled Ramu’s water
bottle and handed it over to him. Ramu thanked Sheethal once again and gathered
his cement bag and continued walking in search of bags. Rani (the sweeper
appointed to clean the colony garden) yelled at him for littering around. He
walked ignoring Rani’s insulting remarks.Ramu was often a soft-target for the
sweepers and other workers in the colony who took a strong dislike to the boy.
They were jealous of the sympathy that he received from the people in the colony.
Ramu walked for
almost an hour and his bag was almost full and he stopped to drink water from
his bottle. Ramu quenched his thirst and walked on until the sun was setting
down and it was almost 6 PM when Ramu reached Khadar Bhai’s old-paper shop.
Khadhar Bhai weighed
the paper bags and gave 25 rupees to Ramu .Ramu’s teeth shone brightly and he
walked to nearby push-cart selling dosa and idly. Ramu gave 20 rupees and
bought himself three dosas and ate them. Ramu drank water from mud pot and
started walking towards the station with a feeling of contentment. Ramu
wondered how many kites he could buy with five rupees and was dreaming about it
and walked on once again. He reached the same spot under the bench near the
tenth platform and spread his torn bed sheet.
Ramu was about to
fall asleep when he took five rupees from his pocket that he had saved that
day. He recovered a coconut shell hidden in a crevice in wall, dropped the five
rupees and shook the shell by closing one end. The shrilling sound of the coin
within the shell gave Ramu happiness. Ramu smiled happily and content with his
day’s earnings, gazed the sky for a while and then spread his legs turned to
his left and lay down. His thin frame looked tired and worn out. It was about
11.45 PM when Ramu suddenly woke up and checked his water bottle. It was still
near him and it was half-full and he fell asleep again reassuring him that he
had water for next day.
PS: This write up was inspired from a one liner given by my friend -Sathish who asked me to write for his short film.
Such a thougt provoking write up .! keep it coming darling !
ReplyDeleteThank you soooo much Vishnu :) :) Thanks dear.. Will sure keep it coming :) :)
Deletebrilliant! keep writing
ReplyDeleteSure :) :) Thanks for reading :) :)
DeleteGood one girl
ReplyDeleteThanks Ranj :) :)
DeleteBrilliant. I have seen quite a few Ramus and have wondered stuff on the same lines. . You have put this up quite beautifully. Kudos !!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jegan :) Actually this is pure fiction.. I've seen any Ramu... The piece was exaggeration of an one-liner given by my friend...
DeleteMoved!! A wonderful one and would make an impact if made into a short film !
ReplyDeleteThanks Ram :) :) Would Surely let Sathish know of it.. :) It was his one liner...
Deletegood one. i am sure the short film would have come out great. all the best !
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Seth... :) :)
Deletebeautifully writtenn..:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sahi :) :) :)
Deletetouching..the rag picker reminds me of Lamb's chimney sweepers, we do have a long way to go.. wish there was a magic wand!
ReplyDeleteMost of wish for the same wand! :)
DeleteMaybe I am too bad at it, but the title and the content of the post did not give me a connect.
ReplyDeleteThe name Ramu was quite repetitive and since there aren't much characters involved its understood that whatever being described is about Ramu only.
The bottle filling up with water was kind of too cliche...
Good start (if its your first attempt), a long way to go...!
Hii Charan.. thanks for your constructive criticism... Will try to match from next post on... Ramu -the name was repeated on purpose... But this is not my first post .. its my 22 post... but in terms of social genre , this is first.. Will keep in mind your comments from next post :)Thanks once again :)
DeleteWonderfully writ :)Did not feel like i was reading something, it was like watching a short film pan out :) The SLAP at the end was unexpected and succinct.. Good one Myts :) Keep writing :)
ReplyDelete:) Thanks Rags... The idea is for a short film... so nice to know that its like a movie... :) will keep writing...
DeleteHey Mytri.. Wonderful.. Keep writing and rocking... :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Rinaldo :) :)
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